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when i was sixteen years old
holden's words were echoed to me, ironically
in a voice not his own. phoney, he'd call it,
but as my literature teacher would say 'reading aloud'
but too softly
too kindly for the room, nineteen of us
all with bored, hooded eyes -

and wouldn't he just hate us?
the boy awkwardly ruffling his hair and turning to
his reflection in shiny glass, smoothing more strands
and the girl whispering and the one next to
her pretending to listen, smacking gum
and me, tracing words with my pupils
doodling stars and clouds on scrap paper

'what do you think of holden?'
'he's weird', 'he's right, i guess?'
but i pity caulfield.

and if i could travel back in time and
scoop up all of holden's baby teeth and
tie them in a little necklace and wrap them around
his neck, i would, and if i could tell

holden caulfield that childhood and cigarettes
are the same: both end.
but it is up to you what you do afterwards
and if you choose to grind it in the ground, do so,
and if you choose to carry on and smile, do so
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ianjolie Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Student Writer
Holden's the one needs be caught... I like the uncertainty in the end, the disinterest is empowering.
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birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Sikizu Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Really really good. I really love this one. :D
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birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
I'm glad you do. (:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Student Writer
Very impressive!
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birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome!
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arachelle905 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. This has some impressive thoughts in it. Nicely expressed! :)
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birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! C:
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