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Do you ever wonder what it's like to come face-to-face
with the planets? To curl your fingers in the air without
meeting thousands of plaster ceilings? What if I showed you
how to cross Saturn's rings, inhale the atmosphere of Venus?
You would enter the Earth (and it's a strange place to call home,
really) with ice crystals at the corners of your mouth and ash
clouds stuck to the insides of your fingernails. Let me tell you,
it's a beginner's worry that you'll burn up in the atmosphere,
but I've had helium and hydrogen daubed on the base of my tongue.

Oh, and do you ever brush past the windows on train carriages
and wonder what cornfields are like when they're your sky
and your Earth's crust? What if I took you to the white cliffs
of somewhere or other and taught you how to spread your wings
and not hit the ground? What if I showed you mazes, and became
the red threads around your thumbs? If you'll just trust me, I'll let you
see that getting lost should only worry you in jungles of concrete - holly
bushes and sea salt are perfectly pleasant things to vanish in. You're
collecting berries and puncturing them, purple stains on chilled skin.


And here's the main thing. Do you ever read the words Hemingway
bled out of his ink pens and wonder what it's like to exhale prose
and have poetry knotting itself around your knuckles and ankles?
That's the one thing you won't be able to taste unless you face it.
Does the word 'lyric' turn to lemon juice on your tongue, do rhymes
spatter the ground when you spit them out? Now, I don't want to worry
you, but if you open your veins to papyrus:

He puts pen to paper and bleeds a saga.
'Bout time I posted something new, eh?
Anatopist is back.

This is a re-write of a poem from what must have been 2010. My 14-year-old self was not a lyrical genius.
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artbyfieldsofsage Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So descriptive ... beautiful.
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:iconhystericalsecretpoet:
HystericalSecretPoet Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014
I love how this flows, it feels so honest and powerful. A piece of poetry with volume (: 
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:iconpsplayer89:
psplayer89 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014   Traditional Artist
wow this is amazing! :o
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! ^.^
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:iconpsplayer89:
psplayer89 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014   Traditional Artist
yw! ^_^
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student Writer
Aaaaaahhhh, congratulations on the DD, girlie! You TOTALLY DESERVE IT. :heart:
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! I'm really pleased!
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome!
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:iconnicholasname:
NicholasName Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey, what's up?
Don't take this the wrong way, but 
This is like perfect. 
I love it. 
I love your words. 
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
I was totally gearing myself up for something different then. Thank you! :')
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:iconnicholasname:
NicholasName Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome.  Meow :3 
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
love it!!!! congrats on the DD!~
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! C:
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:iconthat1personyouforgot:
That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!!
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:iconteddybearcholla:
teddybearcholla Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the imagery!!! Congrats on your DD! :D
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! C:
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:iconteddybearcholla:
teddybearcholla Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome!
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student Writer
Fantastic.

But, a little niggle; 
"Do you ever read the words Hemingway / bled out of his ink pens"
Brilliant line, but surely you would expect pens to be inky? o__O
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
I thought it sounded good, to be honest. I preferred 'ink pens' as opposed to 'pens'. Something about the first option just seemed better to me! But I'm glad you like it! c:


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lunykstormdragon Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Student Writer
I think it's as opposed to quills, or gel pens, or maybe even simply to fit the meter?
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:iconayeaye12:
AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Yeah, I can understand those reasons. That part ust stood out for me, that's all. 
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:iconrafun1312:
rafun1312 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ah, this is so beautiful. It reminds me of my first attempts of writing, of how I learned to love words...
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
I'm glad you're a lover!

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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD, i loved the ending! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :)
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :happybounce:
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation! :clap:
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! ^.^
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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:iconbeltaneh:
Beltaneh Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014
It gives such a "dreamful" feeling :D
Congrats on your DD
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
I love that dreamy feeling, I try my best to make it. ^.^
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Gryffgirl Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014
Beautiful and heartfelt!  Congratulations on your DD! :clap:
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :')
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:iconrobson666:
robson666 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist
congratulations to the well deserved Daily Deviation Clap
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thanks, much appreciated!
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ZombieCakeForThePoet Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful! I had to read it several times, even out loud Cx I love your good work, ur so talented Clap Meow :3 
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you! :') I like to read peoples' poems out loud too.
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Bewaremyfist13 Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2014
God, I perfectly loved this. Very talented, "He puts pen to paper and bleeds a saga". Perfect and gave me chills 
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Glad you liked it!
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:iconchaleka:
Chaleka Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i totally agree with ur poem's character. to be a poet is to be betrayed by paper and ink.
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Student Writer
Definitely true, and poignant!
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:iconheartofafool:
HeartOfAFool Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful and complex! I love your descriptions and how the words roll off your tongue (yes, I read your poems out loud) and how nonplussed the listener is left..... Brilliant job again!
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student Writer
I'm not the only one who reads poetry outloud to myself, then? :p Thank you! C:
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:iconheartofafool:
HeartOfAFool Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course not! And you're very welcome, dear. You deserve it. You are extremely talented.
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SweetsAndCharades Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Amazing :)
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you C:
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SweetsAndCharades Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
You are welcome :aww:
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BelchimaeraStarsong Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013   General Artist
I remember this one. Your writing gets ever more amazing every day.
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:iconbirdsonqs:
birdsonqs Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you! C:
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earthian101 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013
fantastic - I adore your work.
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